The Employee by joshua schwebel
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Re: Updates / check in

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com> Cc: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ >

Hi Bopha,

Greetings from a sunny day in Brussels!

We are really looking forward to reading your text, when you feel ready to share it. 

How is the weeding going? I agree with Josh that sending a longer text is absolutely fine.

Looking forward to hearing back,
Lauren




Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hello Lauren, Josh, 

Admittedly very slowly, but can get a draft to you by tomorrow afternoon. 

I appreciate the offer of a longer text. I'm still at 3000, but believe I can get it down to 2000-2500. And you can let me know where you'd like me to cut further, or provide more details. 

Thank you! Thank you! 

best, 

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Bopha,

It's absolutely fine to have a longer text. We don’t necessarily need to cut it down. Excited to read the draft!

Thank you!
Lauren


Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Josh, Lauren, 

Attached is a draft. I managed to get it down to 2700, but pretty sure we can get it to 2000-2500. I feel like your editing expertise will assist with this. 

- I wasn't sure what your house style guide was. Let me know and I can amend accordingly. 
- There are some footnotes I left in there, as reminders for myself. I can delete it later.
- I used first person, as it was based on personal experience. Happy to change if the voice is inconsistent. 
- There is some present tense/past tense going in the doc. I can amend for consistency. Speaks to my involvement and having completed my job. 
- I removed a chunk about minquon panchayat, curatorial work, and Josh's work to focus more on funding. 

Thanks so much for having a look over it. I'm happy to make edits and changes to make it dovetail with the other texts, and the wider project. My turnaround time will be much more rapid this time. 

best, 





Attachments:

  • file The employed essay draft_bchhay.docx

Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>


p.s. I chose to exercise diplomacy where I could, although the desire was not to. 

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Dear Bopha,

I am so excited to dig into this text - thank you for such a precise and considered contribution!

You should hear back from us by the end of next week with more considered notes. 

Thank you again, this is a really important contribution.

Warmly,
Lauren




Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com> To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ >

Dear Bopha,
I just wanted to echo Lauren’s excitement. Thank you for this thoughtful text, and for the professional, polished state that you have submitted it in.
It is so appreciated.
warm greetings,
Josh

Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > To: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com> Cc: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ >

Hello, 
Oh good, glad it's on the right track. There are definitely aspects of the argument/reflections that I have been nuancing further in my brain. But I will wait for your notes and suggestions. 

have a good weekend.