The Employee by joshua schwebel
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Re: Updates / check in

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Dear Bopha,

Thanks for your patience as Josh and I took a beat to think further. We both continue to be so impressed by and grateful for this text. The work you are doing around creating a bibliography and citing precedents is a very important contribution, as is the way you weave your personal experiences and reflections in with professional and systemic observations. There is so much here that reflects, bolsters, and expands on other texts in the book, so thank you again!

Josh has made a few notes in a google doc that you can find here, and I wanted to share some thoughts below:

- I would like to suggest that you begin this text by telling the reader how you understand its context – what about The Employee as an artwork is prompting the subjects and themes you go on to write about. You do some of this throughout the text, but perhaps an introduction to your reading of the work up top would help situate a reader.

- Please do not feel constrained by the word count. We have texts ranging up to 7000 words at this point, so if you would like more room to better communicate you have the green light from us. Take as much space as you need.

- I would be interested to read what you cut about █████████ and curatorial work, if you would like to share.

- Don't worry about the style. We are using Chicago but have a wonderful copy editor who will bring everything into conformity at the end as long as all the citation information is provided.

- Your use of the first person is great, and on that subject, I wanted to respond to your note about exercising diplomacy although your desire was not to: Josh and I are in complete support if you would like to write more freely. I understand that you are choosing diplomacy for many different reasons, but keep in mind that this publication is a place where you will be supported in candor and truth-telling.

Please let us know if anything is unclear and if you would like to hop on a call to chat anything through. Would it be possible to see the next draft from you in 2 weeks time?

Warmly, 
Lauren

 



Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Lauren, Josh, 

Thank you for the incredibly generous feedback. I really appreciate the opportunity you're giving me to nuance things a little further. Detailed replies in lines below. 

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On Thu, 13 Jul 2023 at 06:04, Lauren Wetmore <> wrote:

Dear Bopha,

Thanks for your patience as Josh and I took a beat to think further. We both continue to be so impressed by and grateful for this text. The work you are doing around creating a bibliography and citing precedents is a very important contribution, as is the way you weave your personal experiences and reflections in with professional and systemic observations. There is so much here that reflects, bolsters, and expands on other texts in the book, so thank you again!

Josh has made a few notes in a google doc that you can find here, and I wanted to share some thoughts below:

- I would like to suggest that you begin this text by telling the reader how you understand its context – what about The Employee as an artwork is prompting the subjects and themes you go on to write about. You do some of this throughout the text, but perhaps an introduction to your reading of the work up top would help situate a reader.


Yes, most certainly. I would love to do this. I think I was trying to not take up too much space with this, as I thought other contributors may have already spoken directly to Josh's The Employed
 

- Please do not feel constrained by the word count. We have texts ranging up to 7000 words at this point, so if you would like more room to better communicate you have the green light from us. Take as much space as you need.


Thank you. That's good to know. 
 

- I would be interested to read what you cut █████ █████████ and curatorial work, if you would like to share.


Ok, I'll either weave it in, or send it to you as an addendum. 
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- Don't worry about the style. We are using Chicago but have a wonderful copy editor who will bring everything into conformity at the end as long as all the citation information is provided.

- Your use of the first person is great, and on that subject, I wanted to respond to your note about exercising diplomacy although your desire was not to: Josh and I are in complete support if you would like to write more freely. I understand that you are choosing diplomacy for many different reasons, but keep in mind that this publication is a place where you will be supported in candor and truth-telling.

 
Thank you. I appreciate that.  
 
Please let us know if anything is unclear and if you would like to hop on a call to chat anything through. Would it be possible to see the next draft from you in 2 weeks time?

2 weeks is most certainly doable. 
Thank you both for your feedback, and the flexibility in style etc. 



Warmly, 
Lauren

 















Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Bopha Chhay <████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Bopha, 

Wonderful to hear that our feedback is useful! And thank you for the context around the ███████ █████████ context. 

If it isn’t too distracting, feel free to think about what images you would like to accompany your essay. We are hoping for images in the public realm but happy to do  r&r work with artists and/or representatives. 

Until soon,
Lauren